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Crowds

I’ve heard it’s normal to be relieved
When you find who you’re looking for in a crowd
They say it’s comfort and relief- I’ve never felt

To be lost in a crowd
A crowd of perfect strangers
Where nobody knows my name, my face, my games
A jumble of people, clothing, hand holding
Sweat and fears and hope and years and life

I’ve heard people like familiarity
So they spend their time with friends and family
They say it’s full of certainty- but I know that

In a crowd of strangers are possibilities
In her gray eyes hides a story
Her lips will never tell me
A jumble of people, clothing, hand holding
Sweat and fears and hope and years and life

Where has his brown rumpled hair been?
What place does he call home-
I’ll never know if it’s Montreal or Rome
A jumble of people, clothing, hand holding
Sweat and fears and hope and years and life

You don’t know- she’s been crying
You don’t know- he is dying
You don’t hear their songs
You just smile as you pass
And you pray

Somewhere there’s a jumble of people
Clothing and handholding
Sweat and fear
Hope and years
Years go passing by them
Life all around them
I will go join them
And be a story untold
A tale never to unfold
Will they see it in my eyes?
See it in my eyes?

I’ll whisper in an ear
“It will be okay.”
He’ll turn around but I’ll be gone in
A jumble of people, clothing, hand holding
Sweat and fears and hope and years
and life
©2009 ~canopie210
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Author's Comments

So if you'd like to comment, please be honest... This is certainly one of my more cliche pieces... Suggestions appreciated!

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:iconhoneybunnyy:
i love the concept!

i love the montreal or rome line.

it's so true! i wrote something about this last year, and it's completely... true! we really don't stop and think of the unknowns of that crowd.

(:

this kinda reminded me of "innocent" by our lady peace. check it out.

is this one of your songs? if so, sing it for me, kay love? (:

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The past knocks on your door and throws stones at your window at 4 in the morning. Well, maybe he thinks it's romantic, he's crazy--but you knew that before.
:iconcanopie210:
Thank you! I think about and write about this concept alot- so it gets REALLY overdone with me. so I'm done with it now. not allowing myself to post ANYMORE like this.
Yes this is one of my songs, so I
I'll sing it for you... sometime :)

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~Life is the most beautiful thing you have now~



~So live it~
:icontalking-pinata:
Do you even have a tune for this?

I'm so proud of you. While it is cliche, your lines make it so original. Like HoneyBunnyy said, the "Montreal" line is really insightful.

Awesome work. :heart:

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:iconmidnight53:
Aww! I really like it a lot! :O I think all has been said about it! ^^ I love the flow

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"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." -Isaac Asimov
"It is a very hard undertaking to seek to please everybody." -Publilius Syrus
"What you are is a question only you can answer." -Lois McMaster Bujold
:iconcanopie210:
Thank you so much!!!! :)

--
~Life is the most beautiful thing you have now~



~So live it~
:iconcanopie210:
Yay! Thank you! I don't have a permanent tune, i just basically make it up as I go along...

--
~Life is the most beautiful thing you have now~



~So live it~
:iconmidnight53:
You're welcome! :) Keep it up!

--
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." -Isaac Asimov
"It is a very hard undertaking to seek to please everybody." -Publilius Syrus
"What you are is a question only you can answer." -Lois McMaster Bujold
:icontalking-pinata:
:O nice.

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"Give a man a fish, and he'll make art. Teach a man a fish, and one day he'll have a pool full of exploding koi" -Neil Gaiman

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:iconcanopie210:
hehehehe

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~Life is the most beautiful thing you have now~



~So live it~

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